http://mittens-220.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] mittens-220.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] dgray_man 2009-05-03 06:45 am (UTC)

I love this chapter. Seeing Cross panic is always enjoyable, since he never does that in the manga much.
Your english is really improving quickly :)
A small change though: Last setence
All happened before the clock struck twelve midnight.

Actually just midnight instead of twelve midnight would do as well, but I think twelve midnight sounds better feeling wise.

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